This week let’s write a river poem. Whether standing on their banks or driving across one on a bridge, you can’t help but feel the metaphors streaming by. Let’s put them to good use before they flow into the sea and post the results in the comments below.
Extra credit: include the word fluviology.
About Bartholomew Barker
Bartholomew Barker is an organizer of Living Poetry, a collection of poets in the Triangle region of North Carolina where he has hosted a monthly feedback workshop for more than decade. His first poetry collection, Wednesday Night Regular, written in and about strip clubs, was published in 2013. His second, Milkshakes and Chilidogs, a chapbook of food inspired poetry was served in 2017. He was nominated for a Pushcart Prize in 2021. Born and raised in Ohio, studied in Chicago, he worked in Connecticut for nearly twenty years before moving to Hillsborough where he lives and writes poetry.
A bridge poem of mine…
Splintered Bridges
Bridges of ancient dreams spanned
On the wings of the bridled albatross
Flying over shallow lakes of delta dross
Bridges crossing from there to where
Above the worlds fractured rivers
Meandering from there to here
Connecting lonely bridal hands
Of people from faraway lands
Bridges trekked by torn and splintered feet
And blooded by bomb-blasted streets
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Posted by ivor20 | November 14, 2022, 7:25 AMLike the original phrase “bridal hands” and the sense of human connection degraded over time.
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Posted by ts19page | November 14, 2022, 10:04 AMThank you for reading 🤗📘
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Posted by ivor20 | November 14, 2022, 12:42 PMVery nice. Love the “bridled albatross” image. Well done!
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Posted by Bartholomew Barker | November 14, 2022, 7:07 PMThank you Bart
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Posted by ivor20 | November 14, 2022, 9:22 PMOh I love this one!
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Posted by Cassa Bassa | November 15, 2022, 4:59 PMThank you kindly Cassa
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Posted by ivor20 | November 15, 2022, 5:00 PMShade
When poetry means more to the poet’s loving eye,
than it does on the page, rewrite.
White page and black marks winding and looping
are all the reader has for mapping the interior.
A misread sign, a fluvial boundary
a path mistaken for a river,
is not the fault, never the fault
of that random reader’s eye,
The reader who selects from the bin a used book,
blows dust from the cover, turns the page,
scanning, the way a fortune teller reads a proffered palm,
to try which way the universe is blowing,
Not the reader’s error that leads into sin, but yours,
the designer who lays traps, bad allusions,
plants fruit trees along the street,
with harvest ripe for picking, pendulous and sweet.
When all along the man with reading glasses
in the heat, thirty seven centigrade,
wanted, was looking for, only wished to find,
a cooling thought of shade.
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Posted by ts19page | November 14, 2022, 9:59 AMVery nice, especially the fluvial stanza. It does raise the interesting question of how much should we, as poets, demand from our readers. The answer, of course, is “depends” the same as every other question. Well done.
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Posted by Bartholomew Barker | November 14, 2022, 7:13 PMYes, I agree, this question is better left unanswered, especially since demands upon people who are not inclined to experience the world in a learning mode, are simply rejected, and who can blame them? The seeking mind…not common.
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Posted by ts19page | November 14, 2022, 10:34 PMThis poem made me wonder what’s the poet wrote that is so intriguing to the reader.
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Posted by Cassa Bassa | November 15, 2022, 5:01 PMWell, the thing is – the poem is not intriguing if the meaning is lost upon the reader, as I guess, ironically, was true with this poem! To explain: If you are looking for a nice love poem and you find a poem about the futility of love, that would not work, right? Thanks for reading..
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Posted by ts19page | November 15, 2022, 6:02 PMSometimes a poem is open to interpretation depending on the reader’s own experience and perception of views. I guess the power of poetry can be in the uncertainty. Though provoking! I like a poem that I read and reread and ponder on. The opportunity to interact with the writer makes it even more interesting. Thank you!
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Posted by Cassa Bassa | November 15, 2022, 9:44 PM*thought provoking.
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Posted by Cassa Bassa | November 15, 2022, 9:44 PMI agree! A poem can have many dimensions and some show up only after several readings.
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Posted by ts19page | November 16, 2022, 9:27 AMAt the banks of Styx
waters of sorrow
flow into nowhere
a fluviological anomaly
just like the course of tears
burning their trails
across cheeks, over the jaw
Two flowing tributes
to human folly,
judgement, remorse
paid in water,
blind in all ways
but blissfully serene…
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Posted by utopicdystopian | November 14, 2022, 10:00 AMLike this.. the ‘fluviological anomaly” ‘blind in all ways’ and especially ‘paid in water’- an excellent phrase!
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Posted by ts19page | November 14, 2022, 10:53 AMthank you 🙏🏼
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Posted by utopicdystopian | November 14, 2022, 5:05 PMLovely! Bonus points scored for “fluviological” and I love the river as tears image. Great work!
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Posted by Bartholomew Barker | November 14, 2022, 7:14 PMThank you 🙏🏼
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Posted by utopicdystopian | November 14, 2022, 7:17 PMMy years of fluviology
have done nothing
to help me understand
this river of tears
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Posted by JeanMarie | November 14, 2022, 10:14 PMLovely and bonus points for “fluviology”!
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Posted by Bartholomew Barker | November 14, 2022, 10:32 PMI really like the thought of having ‘years of fluviology’ ! Cool thought.
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Posted by ts19page | November 16, 2022, 9:25 AMThanks!
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Posted by JeanMarie | November 16, 2022, 3:31 PMUsually I take a week on a prompt but this is close to home.
Chessie
Delmarva does not boast
A mighty river like the Mississippi
All the smaller rivers, streams, and creeks,
A fluviologists dream,
Flow to the mighty Chesapeake estuary
Where sweet blue crabs dream blue crab dreams
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Posted by Second Act Blogger | November 14, 2022, 10:45 PMLove that last line. Great work and bonus points for “fluviologists”!
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Posted by Bartholomew Barker | November 14, 2022, 11:17 PMNice thought ‘sweet’ blue crabs!
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Posted by ts19page | November 15, 2022, 8:44 AMThey are sweet when cooked. Hope their sleeping dreams are also sweet
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Posted by Second Act Blogger | November 15, 2022, 7:48 PML
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Posted by Second Act Blogger | November 15, 2022, 8:15 AMRiver
I wanted to be a lake
But you made me a river
Passion gushed from my sanctuary
Earnestly flowed toward you
You were an island
But I wanted you to be a raft
I was so far gone with my mind
incapable of being tied down
My tears broke the flood gate
Forever gone with the stream
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Posted by Cassa Bassa | November 15, 2022, 5:14 PMLike the images of love and passion in this…especially: “…I wanted you to be a raft..’ !
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Posted by ts19page | November 15, 2022, 5:48 PMLove the opening two lines and the island/raft image. Great work!
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Posted by Bartholomew Barker | November 15, 2022, 7:03 PMIn silence
the perfection of creation is seen
the noise we make
a crass ugliness on the world
is our selfish addition
Oh river!
cleanse me of my arrogance
wipe away these words from the page
dissolve them in truth
so that all that is left
is a reflection
of the true Word
the only word ever spoken
echoing forever
in the still silence
calling for those that will submit
to the scrutiny of the quiet
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Posted by Chris Clarke | November 20, 2022, 12:36 PMVery nice! Love the three lines “the only word ever spoken / echoing forever / in the still silence” Great job!
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Posted by Bartholomew Barker | November 20, 2022, 7:59 PMThe ocean roils and churns inside
A tempest of emotions I cannot hide
The waves of neglect crash against my shore
Leaving me battered, broken and sore
I long to dive into the cool, clear depths
To escape the pain and emotional depts
But the ocean is vast and treacherous, I fear
I cannot swim, I cannot persevere
So I stand on the shore and watch it rage
Hoping for calm, for a brighter age
But the waves of neglect continue to pound
Leaving me lost and adrift, no solid ground
I am a ship tossed on a stormy sea
Searching for safe harbor, desperately
But the neglect just keeps on coming, never-ending
Leaving me to face it, defending
I am but a small and fragile vessel
In the face of this emotional wrestle
But I’ll keep on fighting, keep on trying
Hoping one day the ocean will stop denying
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Posted by A POET ON MOTION | December 31, 2022, 2:22 AMGreat use of metaphor. Thanks for sharing!
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Posted by Bartholomew Barker | December 31, 2022, 10:49 AMThanks so much sir, I enjoyed your prompts💝
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Posted by A POET ON MOTION | January 1, 2023, 12:58 AM